Number One on the Billboard Charts

Number One on the Billboard ChartsBy, Nan Claire Falkner

“It’s a museum now.” Carole said.

“This is where all those great songs came from?” Harry asked.

“Yes, sweetie, we wrote most of them here.”

“Mama, why didn’t they ever acknowledge you?”

“Well, this business is cut-throat, and even though I wrote two hits for Dyn-Dyn , there was a complication.”

“Well, I think it stinks – you deserved your name on those songs – just as much as they did.”

Cal was sitting in the sunlit chair when they walked in the room.

“Hey Babe! I see you got my first check.”

“Cal, this is your son Harry.”

What?

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54 thoughts on “Number One on the Billboard Charts

  1. Hi, Nan. Good, creative story based on this week’s prompt. I was confused by this: “Walking into the studio, there sat Cal . . . ” I’m guessing this must be one of those misplaced modifiers because Cal can’t be walking and sitting all at the same time. May I suggest instead: “As mother and son walked into the studio, they saw Cal . . .”

    • Dear Marie Gail – You are right – it was so poorly written – now I’ve changed it. See if you like it any better and thanks for bringing this to my attention! I really DO appreciate it! Nan 🙂

    • Dear Rochelle, Thank you so much for reading and commenting. At some point, I realized that this is a picture of your son’s music room. WOW! I bet he has had a blast in there. There were so many different things that we could pick from (in this picture) to write about. And as always, thank you for being our leader! Nan 🙂

      • Dear Nan,

        That’s only one side of the room. To the right of those records is a rather large row of guitars. My son earns a portion of his living with his music. To say I’m proud of him would be an understatement.

        Shalom,

        Rochelle

  2. Great dialogue and I love a twisty ending. This is such a fun, supportive group. I look forward to getting such supportive critique in my creative writing. (And by creative, I mean my use of punctuation.). 😄

  3. Well that’s one way to let son and dad know – would love to know what comes next. (I agree with Patrick on the word order – the original version and more impact.)

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